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Ooh! Now this was interesting - a ghost, a girl (whom I assume the ghost is quite find of) and... I don't know, I think this simple, poetic writing style ...

Hey there! So first off, I'd like to point out the nitpicks: - In the first paragraph, I feel like there are too many similies, and it sort of jarrs ...

Wow... Wow, you've done an excellent job here! I feel like you've really captured how unfair, how inhumane animal cruelty is - dog fights, chicken fights...it's hard to believe that ...