Hopeless-Dreams

Well the course is called languages or travel. There is four languages that we learn, french Gaelic, Italian, and Spanish. In the class though we don't do very much grammar ...

hmmm... i think you should give just a little more. the mystery part is good. it snags the reader. Like i want to read on and see what happened. But ...

hhaha okay. anyways i didn't find much wrong. try to make it more detailed though. it almost looks like you have a base for a good preface. try to make ...

its not ban an okay start. i don't really see any romance though yet. maybe try to bring that in. and well i thing i find really wrong is that ...

wow. i really like that, extremely interesting. hmmm but there is something that's not very right with it. its a good start though. its confusing though, we don't know whats ...

I don't really think that's this needed a prologue, I would say this would be a good start to your first chapter. For me it didn't really catch my attention. ...

thanks! the next chapter wont be out for awhile though. ill put it up as soon as I'm done it.

thanks for the great responses.(Eraqio, and Vannah[Was All She Wrote]) And to Samuel Garrison... i would attempt to write it in third person but... I'm not that great at it. ...

Well Hello there, I must say that would an interesting dream. i wish mine were like that.... Anyway i thought it was a good start and if you posted anymore, ...

Thanks for your your opinion. I'm Scottish as well, i don't have a Scottish last name though but my clan in the Mathison I'm about 3/4 Scottish and the rest ...

Wow i didn't really think anyone would really answer that. Well I'm not from the maritimes. I'm actually from b.c and I'm taking a Gaelic course. so that's how i ...

Feasgar Math (Which is good afternoon or good evening in Gaelic) Well I'm new obvious. So my name is Nadine, and well i thought it would be fun to put ...

*Well this was my first story i put on here so i hope everyone likes this. I would like to say that this is the begging of a story like ...