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CA-PI-TA-LI-ZA-TION!! Grar! I noted that the capitalization in this piece was rather patchy. Patchy grammar actually deters me and a lot of other readers, which is why it's so important. ...

Hi, I'm Hollow and I shall be your reviewer today! (: This piece certainly could be edited. Some examples: It starts with: Epilogue And epilogues belong at the end, not ...

I... am a nitpicker. Just thought I should let you know before we begin. I only found a few mistakes, all grammatical. They were very minor, yet they bothered me, ...

Wow, this was great! It really got my attention. I liked the descriptions, how the background information wasn't just thrown at me, and how you DIDN'T start with Hi, I'm ...

Wow... That really caught my attention. It's a great piece- no spelling or grammar errors that I could see, however, there was one thing that did bother me. Unfortunately for ...

Dude. Best. Ever. Love it! (:

in a bright sunny casual day there was Bob a tall popular likeable young man which realy had a knack with the ladies. his charming appearance would leave them to ...

Wow! I love how relatable this is. It's something almost every teenager goes through, with just enough exaggeration to be hilarious but not corny or overly-laughable. Your character seems very ...

Whoa. That was intense! I love it! I love your descriptions. I don't think I found a single mis-spelled words. Your grammar was, almost entirely, perfect. I only found a ...

What the Nightling is will be revealed next chapter when Arabella wakes up to a freakish nightmare!

Could you tell me where they are? I want this chapter to shine as bright as it can! (wow, that was super corny..)

When I awaken, the sun is already high in the sky. I don't open my eyes immediately, and I just want to stay wrapped up in my bedsheets, safe and ...

Personally, I like hardcopy better. It just seems, to me, more comfortable. The saying is, "Cuddle up with a nice book," not a "nice eBook." Also, I'm technologically retarded, so ...

Wow! I thought this was really good! Nice! I only found one thing I didn't like. In the poem, instead of "you," "u" was written. It just seems low-quality. So, ...

Whoa! Very gripping! Once you actually get to the beginning, you don't want to stop reading! Wonderful! I LOVE IT. It's very original, and I've never heard of a hellwolf, ...