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A bright orange light blazed as Mark lit a torch. James cast his eyes around the weary group of surviving rebels. There were only ten of them now, battered and ...

A prologue is an option, but a bad one. If a prologue seems info-dumpy people tend to skip straight to the first chapter. Is it really necessary for the reader ...

hurry up! And don't, don't ever, forget to critique it afterward, alright? Just sounding a little pushy there. Now on with the review. The drivers ahead seemed to keep their ...

Hi Kyllorac, I was going to say gilded, but the bloke above me beat me to it. The repetition doesn't stick out much, so I wouldn't worry about it. Even ...

Cheers for the review. When I finally finish school (14 weeks to go now) I'll be able to get stuck back into my writing. There probably won't be much from ...

Well, i got bored in my year 10 science class, so i went to the back of the room and started to read a year 13 chemistry book. You have ...

I can't see out the side windows of my car because I hung jumpers there to keep the sun off my laptop screen. On writing days I drive off somewhere ...

I think believability would be the most important thing to take into account. Not everything needs to be different just for the sake of things being different on this world. ...

A Clockwork Orange, by Anthony Burgess, tells of a dystopian future, in which the actions of youth bring up profound ethical issues relevant in our modern society. It supports the ...

Hi, do you live in Western Australia - I do. If during writing this novel you need any information about WA you can ask me. I've been around most of ...

Note: Eric was called George in the earlier versions of the prologue, but I've changed his name. Eric lay down on his mattress, the fatigue from the day's march pulling ...

This is a heartwarming tale. To think that people at war can put aside their differences and get to know each other as friends rather than just "the enemy". If ...

Here's one for you. The Accidental Rebellion chapter 3. I believe you reviewed the prologue for this as well. Thanks a lot.

What I want to get out of this idea is just a one guy (main character) taking on hundreds, possibly thousands and coming out with a few bruises or scratches, ...

Don't try to "get it". That's not the idea. :wink: Most of my works are rated R. The Accidental Rebellion is rated R because of violence and swearing (except chapter ...