Hiccup

So, I'm having trouble with a story I'm planning to write. I've been a little jittery with the whole process, as I've always ventured towards beginning the first chapter and ...

Recently started into my very first novel. I'm still trying to figure the title out, and the plot itself, but I felt like sharing what I have for the prologue ...

Thanks, Sannah. After going over my work I did catch a few errors. My thoughts began to break away as the one with sheer black fur and deep brown eyes ...

I am named for The beginning threw me off. I believe the correct term would be 'I am named after'. a tiny Slavic woman who nonetheless was I think you ...

I'd like to introduce my newest novel, Piper (Possibly going to change the name). Please tell me what you think; If you see any errors, I'd love it if you'd ...

Very nice story, however I noticed a few things... Smack, smack, smack... My feet pounded softly against the floor as I made my way, slouching, down the corridor. The 'smack' ...

Very nice story, I enjoyed reading it. :) However, something that bothered me a bit... Maybe that’s why we are where we are today. Maybe that’s why there’s not a ...

Thank you, both. :) CrazyMonkey, no, I meant what I meant. It's saying the victim is not afraid, and she is not fighting back, simply letting them destory her slowly. ...

The 'beasts' are wolves, (as I roughly put them together as), otherwise those little thoughts in your head that put you down. Sometimes, these beasts appear as a person, saying ...

a slender, fragile age of seventeen. the sky was crying for her, for all the tears she held back - for all the times she pretended didn't exist. a raindrop ...

the one i can count on,the one i can trustplease don't ever fade from my life i need you by my side because without you i would die.i'd have no ...

" When Adam comes, can I just go out?" Elizabeth asked. Delete the space. Also, I did not like the ending very much. Maybe that's just me. It was fairly ...

Dull, bored, crystal, blue eyes flickered back and forth as she tried to make out this once proud, known city. No need for the coma after crystal. A little girl ...

First of all, you used 'Bloom' much to often. It made is sound choppy at many points. Try using different terms, such as 'she', or 'the young girl', or anything ...

All I could think was that those stupid lights were making her and my tear-stained faces all shiny. I felt this sentence was a bit choppy...'all shiny' threw it off ...