HessicaJolt

This most definitely has potential. I loved the ending, finding out that his killer was the girl he loved. This just HAS to be expanded and made into a more ...

So I agree with the rest of them that this story could be a lot better with the help of more details on the characters. Maybe even more interesting with ...

This actually gave an in-depth story to what I think the song is all about! Totally awesome! I wish I could forget it, so I could read it again. I ...

Excellent job! The end almost scared me though, I thought he died. Great job, I love the piece, and really there wasn't anything to critique that I could find. And ...

' Room 209 ' The symbols on the wooden door had become familiar to my eyes. Having walked into this room more than my own front door, it was understandable. ...

This reminded me of my best friend/boyfriend; Whom I love oh so much. Great job! I don't see anything grammar wise that you could change. The detailing was great, but ...

Great idea for a poem, I liked it very much. :] The only thing I suggest is making it flow more fluently ...if you get what I'm saying. When reading ...

I really like this poem. Its dramatic and was crafted very well. There are no changes that I would make in this poem, I like it the way it is. ...

"Are you awake?" When I heard her voice, my eyes fluttered open. I blinked twice before trying to sit up. The first thing I felt was a sharp pain in ...