Heidigirl666

You've changed it a bit...it's better actually from the first draft I read. I love the idea of someone talking to a stuffed pig in their room who's trying to ...

:cry: You made me cry... :D No, not really. Yes, I do have a habit of letting my sentences run away with me sometimes. :roll: Where does it need a ...

Procedure, hmmm...complicated. Well, as regards to basic ones, completely tape off the area, make an appeal for witnesses if none have come forward (not just people that saw something, but ...

I don't torture my characters on purpose, they just get tortured anyway. The story happens by itself, even when I don't want it to, but generally, yes, all my characters ...

I really liked this. I thought it was a really strong piece of writing, and I liked that it didn't have a definitive ending, if that was the ending. :) ...

Welcome, me bonny wee dormouse. I'm reading a scottish book at the moment, can you tell? :lol: Are you writing about people with mental illnesses? Why haven't I seen any ...

I'm shocked. :shock: :lol: No, seriously, what sort of uptight school did you go to? I thought it was quite well written too, although you might want to watch how ...

I thought this wasn't a bad start. It was interesting and surprising and it did make you want to read more. You might want to look out for inconsistencies though. ...

Write your first draft with your heart. Re-write with your head. Simple as that. :D

Thanks for the tips and positive comments. GryphonFledgling, I kind of know what you mean about not being able to tell between his words and the narration, but it's actually ...

Well, from what I remember (bearing in mind this was several years ago) there was a lot of effort after world war one put into social projects clearing away slums ...

I read an article recently about left handed people being more prone to accidents (I think it was in the Sunday Times in the UK), because of tools etc being ...

Re: agriculture. It really depends on what sort of agriculture, whether cattle or livestock farming, or crops. Where we used to live in Gloucestershire, lots of sheep and cows. Where ...

Oops. It's gone. :wink:

I thought this was a really good piece, it really grabs you and makes you want to read on, so I hope you write more! But as someone else said, ...