Heidigirl666

I think it's definitely all down to imagination and having the ability to empathise; if you have a strong sense of empathy it's easy to imagine what your characters might ...

When dealing with a scientific matter (eg. paleontology) it's best to leave the Bible - or any other religious book - out of it. Sticking with the facts and evidence ...

:? No wonder you're confused. I'm not sure there is a way to make the literal translation of the bible fit with science; however, it you take a more symbolic ...

I liked this, and I couldn't find anything to really criticise either; there's only one thing that spoils it for me, do you have to use the word 'homosexuality'? Can ...

I have to agree, it's a lot of telling rather than showing, and the dialogue was so forced it was actually quite painful to read (especially Daniel's-remember, he's six, and ...

The only waiting rooms I've ever been in have had the dullest magazines ever, been really quiet (everyone whispering practically) and had really uncomfortable chairs (not great when you're seeing ...

Leant is a word. It's British English. Like 'learnt'. :D I know 'and' is used to much in the beginning. Someone already pointed that out, KJ. :wink: I know. I'm ...

Can you honestly say that you follow the Bible to the letter? Had any shellfish lately? Had a hair cut? Worn clothes made of two cloths? I suspect the answer ...

Wow, I really like this; the beginning was really powerful and drew you in, and I liked the idea. Using 'gosh' at the end though...bit of a 'goody-goody' type word. ...

I agree that the dialogue and grammar need some work. The lack of punctuation in the dialogue is quite distracting. :wink: I also have a suggestion to make; when writing ...

This confused me a little; has the main character always been blind, or became blind in childhood? :? Because if she's always been blind it makes little sense (for example ...

'What, you can control the wind? That is like...sweet man, seriously.'-Blake 'I dunno, I can think of better powers to have, like being able to walk through walls.'-Ethan 'Yeah, but ...

Deleted; off to enter in a competition. :wink:

Oh, I get migraines too. They're awful. Although mine tend to be the 'my brain is about to go splat in my skull, must lie in dark room and die' ...

we could suggest a name like Bob in a fantasy novel. Why couldn't someone in a fantasy novel be called Bob? It's a bit cliched to give all your fantasy ...