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Thanks so much, Clarity! This is really useful. The reason why it's so short is because it had to be exactly 750 words, and based off the prompt above. So, ...

Thank you so much!

Thank you!

Thank you! There is still a lot to be done, and I quite agree that some of the sentences sound choppy. Oh well, the editing and rewriting process begins! Your ...

Thanks Mizzle, Aliza and Skins. As soon as Skins pointed out the relation between twilight, I started thinking about my plot and realized it was a lot like twilight. Or ...

Guys, honestly, I want it to be ripped apart. I know it's not awesome! I'd prefer longer reviews that tell me what's wrong.

Far from it ;)

And to the more sensible person above him, in this case I'm no better than he is, except for the fact that I don't agree with what I said and ...

Can a moderator lock this, I see no sense in it being moved up all the time by people who just have to comment, even though this issue has been ...

Yes, I did mean Henry VIII, sorry. Let's face it though, if Henry didn't feel the need to burn down Catholic churches, but let people live in peace the way ...

@Boolovesyou: No, I'm definitely straight ;) @LadyPurple and RazHuni: I know he's probably not worth getting annoyed over, but sometimes you can't help it.

Sandvich, I thought you'd like to know it's not equasion but equation. Just for future refference. All sexist points are invalid. When someone is stupid enough to consider them true, ...

Thank you, that was really detailed and it will actually help me in general, not with just this piece specifically. As for why 'Women' was capitalized and 'men' was not, ...

Thanks Snoink and RazHuni, these are actually pretty good ideas and if I ever feel sexist again, I will definitely use them to improve this piece of writing :P. I ...

Meh, it's still entertaining to write when you feel powerless to do anything else.