Hecate

Thank you for all the crits, and to the last person ahahha yes Abbey is 12..or around that age =)

Great Pace. This is a scene full of tension from what I can tell, so pace would be important. Tension is presented well, too. There is also foreshadowing that is ...

Beautiful. Gripping. I don't know how else to describe it. I'm not very good at reviewing poetry, so I can't start nit picking at your techniques. However, this is absolutely ...

HAhhahahhaha, well it was funny, you definately achieved that, in fact I was laughing. I loved how ditzy you made Pink sound, and when she said 'I thought you were ...

Could you please review this? It's the beginning, and it's not horror YET, but it will be

Could you please review this? It's not too long:

Could you please review this? Pretty please, it's a fantasy fiction story, and (for now) is E rated. It's not too long, not sure how many words, but it's only ...

Hey, could you please review this? I know it's a tad weird..

This is absolutely hilarious. I was laughing my head off the WHOLE time. I don't think anyone can review this, it's hard to look for grammar/ spelling or whatever mistakes ...

I am looking for my clown. They say that you are gone, but I refuse to believe it . You are beautiful and strong and brave, and I know you ...

It was an interesting read, actually. Good Job! A bit spooky if it's really true, but overall you've worked greatly with stimulus to create a good story. Cael seemed a ...

This is absolutely beautiful. The choice of words, the techniques used, everything is amazing. As I read it, I got that feeling in my chest that you get when you ...

I think it was a very sweet story, if a bit unrealistic. There weren't a lot of grammar errors that I could detect, but then again I'm hardly the Grammar ...

Tons of run-on sentences! Makes it hard to read! As for the actual story, it's kind of sweet in its own way, although it's nothing amazing. I would develop the ...

Thanks people! Your crits were really helpful! May be, I will continue it, although I don't really know what happens next, because I just randomly wrote it, I'll try and ...