Heatherish

this story caught my attention quickly. i hope you post more soon. i am very curious to know why only Tarina has a fairy and how she got one. how ...

i like this story. it immediately caught my attention and kept it. zoe is an easy character to relate too. i also like how you ended the chapter...rather i hate ...

** although grammar and spelling corrections are always welcome, i would really appreciate people commenting on my characters, plot, etc. i want to know if the characters are believable, if ...

wow...i really like your characters, especially charlotte she already has dimension....none of the other characters seem like main characters (YET?) but hey too are shaping up not sure where you ...

wow...that was an incredible start...i am still confused on a lot of things but its nothing that cant be cleared up in the future...i urge you to continue writing...please?

YAY!! excited for your comments...the preface was the first thing i wrote (obv) and it was a little weak but i didnt know how to change it so im glad ...

ooooo i didnt realize there already WAS a chapter 1 woo hooo!! cant wait!!

o come on!! you have to at least have some ideas about where you want to take this story!!! thats how i write, i know my characters need to get ...

i got through about half of the story but couldnt read any more because of the spacing and the lack of quotation marks...also there are a bunch of spelling and ...

this story definitely sparked my interest...i want to read more about this character and find out where she is going....mb why she likes the dark so much...why she is taking ...

i think the basis of this story is good but there are some things you can change that would make it better. -i dont think this entry is beleiveable as ...

yea thats what i was thinking too *sigh* ill wait till tomorrow or the next day to put it up just wicked excited i have at lease ONE person who ...

yea i can see where those two statements could seem confusing....she doesnt feel much and they will explain it later on also i think i kind of reveal more of ...

um...i dont understand your question, maybe quote the part(s) you're talking about and i can explain or fix whatever it is. and THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH i love that YOU ...

wow ok thanks those are really good ideas *goes to edit* *back from editing* so i changed the first word, and i went back and added in what she experienced ...