Haylie

I really, really liked this :') I like the way you wrote it, and almost everything about it xD Twas awesome, keep it up!

This is more of a lyric poem than a romantic story. However i like it, it's good. Carry on writing!

I was walkin' barefoot along the short, green grass, that tickled my feet. It was a nice summer day, I would say about 25 degrees. The sun beamed down upon ...

I think that you could develop this into a bigger story :) I think it would work quite well, but you could make twists in it, to make it more ...

You have a really nice story coming along, there's a few spelling mistakes you have however and along with grammar mistakes. We all have them though. "My name is not ...

You had barely any comma's, expecially where you needed them. Even in your first line. I have to admit it needs a little edditing. For example. "Christi was a very ...

I heard footsteps. They were coming closer and closer. The sound of crunching pebbles under their feet. Then someone stood in front of me, I could see their feet and ...

I actually loved this :') You're a really good writer. Keep it up!

Aaaw thank you :D yeah there always is to be honest.

It seems like there should've been a bit more story to it. In my opinion anyway. I can see this workin' as a big story, you might want to do ...

He just sat there, staring out to the brilliant blue crystal clear water, topless as usual. He was gorgeous, I couldn't imagine having anyone better than him. With his chocolate ...

I like your plot of your story, however you have a few spelling mistakes and you need to remember to capitalize your I's (: