Haylie

I like the idea of the story However to improve you could add more detail and decription, such as, when you talk about the accidents, and his bleeding leg, you ...

This is amazing!! It's so cute, :') Like it's a little love story, The only problem i found with it was you said everyt ime It should be [quote]every time[quote] ...

I'm not going to put the usual 'dear' and stuff in here, i'll just write how I feel, so here goes. To Joel, I love you to bits, to be ...

I really liked you're story, you spelt some words incorrectly, but they have already been said so i won't repeat. To improve, I think you could describe what he was ...

You have a lot of feeling in what you write, however it didn't really engage me much. You could perhaps say the smells of the surroundings in your story, or ...

In one way, I didn't want to leave home, it was where I grew up; where I spent my childhood. I loved it, but I couldn't stay there anymore, not ...

I must say, that was AMAZING!! I loved it :') You're an excellant writer, I couldn't find any flaws in that at all x) LOVED IT! Keep of writing, i'll ...

You have a nice little plot ;D However... I noticed a few spellin' mistakes, your grammar was really good though. Like in the first sentence Another Sunday, the same reutine ...

I'm sorry, but this kind of bored me right from the start :/ I'm sure you're a good writer though, for me there was just too much detail.

Why are you so good at writing >< Gawd, I'm jelous. Okay first thing is you need a comma I'd just been thinking (,) about what would happen if we'd ...

I liked it :3 The emotions she feels come through really well, I must say. Carry on writing! Much loves xx

Wow! That's frickin' amazin' I couldn't see any flaws at all :') LOVE IT!!

That's such a good way of decribing love :') It's pretty much true. I had one person in my head when i was reading this :') I actually loved it. ...

Wow i actually loved this :') You're really good. How old are you? Your grammar is almost perfect. Apart from missing a couple of comma's out Like. Gone, off into ...

Wow! That's really good :') I couldn't stop reading it. I like how you write too (: Keep on writing (y)