Hawkie

I like this. It's descriptive and oddly chilling. Drowning is a primal fear that this piece definitely addresses. I agree with the other reviews about the flow of the story ...

Hi Sophie! I'm Hawkie and welcome to YWS! I think you'll definitely enjoy it here. :D

On to chapter 2. Overall, I liked it much better than chapter one. It wasn't as long-winded and there was more dialogue and action. Nice job. I didn't like the ...

Nope. TPBM has at least 3 pets.

Banned because I can't think of another reason to ban you.

Hello, hello, it's your editor Hawkie here, I just finished chapter one. ^^ I'll do the other chapters later, but here's a quick rip-up on the first one. You always, ...

Banned for being older than me.

Hello, hello, it's your editor Hawkie here, I just finished chapter one. ^^ I'll do the other chapters later, but here's a quick rip-up on the first one. One thing ...

xD It's funny. A little . . . odd, but funny! 7/10

Hiya there! This is a nice beginning to a story. The "children with special powers" thing is used fairly often, but definitely not done to death. I can see many, ...

Banned for living in Middle Earth.

Banned for thinking salsa's not cool.

EDIT: This poem has been rewritten and revised! Check out "Four Roses" under Narrative Poetry to see what it's become. Thanks! ************************************** Their love was all a put-on. We do

Today, some random 2nd graders gave me Starburst. xD

Hi, Phantom! Looks like this first rip-apart is mine! Nitpicky Stuff The sun was setting fast and I was lost. Good beginning. I started walking again, searching for a place ...