Hawkie

Hey there. I'm Hawkie, and I'll be reviewing you today. i. Nit-picks I stand for a moment in the aisle and can feel everyone’s eyes on the black patch over ...

. . . they would find the land of milk and honey, although . . .

An angel. Small, quiet, and virtuous. Skyler Freeman

. . . Shina, that was epic. xDDD Anyway! Welcome to YWS! We love new members . . . they're very tasty . . . just kidding! ^^ It's great ...

Skyler would call out a warning to the man, as would Conrad; Alexis would pass inconspicuously by and report it to the police, Rapha would probably scream. Alwyn wouldn't know ...

Really great job; I love the angel and the black background. I would, however, add a little light into the black to give it more of an ethereal feel, like ...

. . . wow. That was beautiful! I can't really think of much to critique. Seriously. I'm almost at a loss for words. Not completely, though! ;) One thing I ...

Hi Stripes! I'm Hawkie and I'll be reviewing you today. Why is your poem called "Granddad Dying?" There's nothing about a granddad in it, or death. Just a spider on ...

"Cold. I don't want to smell like sweat." - Skyler "Hot! Sand and sun for me!" - Conrad "Hot. It might be uncomfortable, but at least you wouldn't freeze to ...

Hi, I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. ^^ i. Nit-picks but they wouldn’t open under all of my strength. "Under" sounds awkward. I'd rephrase it as "they wouldn't ...

Slobber

. . . this man turned out to be evil, resulting in much angst. Meanwhile, the cows stampeded . . .

. . . died, inspiring fangirls worldwide to . . .

Peel

Hmmm, probably a romance story, maybe with werewolves in it, from the POV of a reasonably young girl. I would read the blurb, at least. Orphans Among Dragons