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Re: One Night Stand
I woke this morning, and your name was splashed across the walls. I woke this morning to find a bag of stones hanging heavy from my chest. Lodged between two ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: I write
Twist out of myself, grey tornado. Pour out of these ears, these lungs, through this, my belly. I become something without a body, I am a thought, I am I ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: Dirty Words
Dirty thoughts strapped tight in my chest, heave forward in a bellowing cough. Swoop out of me like some black bird. A kiss of clouds, swipe the sky with sharp ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: Bruise (18+ Swearing)
A deep bruise sits on my neck, scraped off of my one night lover’s tongue. Spots of blood raised to the surface, by pursed lips, with an angry suck. He ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: Metal Man. (Rated 18+)
When I say real life events, I mean literally, everything, the robot idea included, that's what he said to get me to do it. But I can see how that ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: Metal Man. (Rated 18+)
The poem is based off real life events. I was told to edit the poem this way by my poetry lecturer, she said it worked better without all the 'explaining ...
Jan 11, 2012 -
Re: Metal Man. (Rated 18+)
Let’s play a game. He palmed my small back into a stoop, and we disappeared into the tent. Daddy had set it up with me that morning. He lay down ...
Jan 9, 2012 -
Re: Mother
Thank you :) I'm glad that you like it.
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: New Eyes.
Thank you! You're very sweet to say that :) I'm so happy you like it :)
Sep 30, 2011 -
Re: Flowers.
Thanks for your review :) I really appreciate it, just one thing that I want to try and get across about the poem, if that's OK, haha, I do agree ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Nymph.
I found her lying in the river bed on a blanket of ash. A flurry of dust and embers circling above and around her. She was still. Her hair, a ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Flowers.
Have you ever wanted to kill someone? I have. She’s blonde. Freckles, mid thirties. Long hair, manicured nails. Born in a fishing town, poor. Tried to clean herself up, but ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: I used to be a butterfly
With a little squeak here, and a squeak there, this poem could be even more beautiful than it already is. Such things as the timing of words to create correct ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Sunshine and Sirens
Quite similar to Paradise Lost, in context only, I think. Dealing with ancient evils, ect. You have written a wonderful poem, and I adore the ideas and themes. The message ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Nothing
This made me both very sad and very proud. I don't know you, so to say I'm proud may seem a little invading, but none the less, I am proud ...
Sep 28, 2011
