HarpoMarx

it's good. But try and link up some of the...I don't know what you call them in poetry terms but some of the lines...if you get what i mean. I ...

Good. I just changed a few things they are highlighted in red. One hand rested on the wheel, the other on my bound hands. He kept glancing into my eyes, ...

GREAT WORK just have a look at some of the changes I think should go in. “ Crazy ” Elisa spits the word like its some foul, disgusting thing of ...

Gavin squinted through the stampede of shoes, “Don’t think it’s nothin’. Prob’ly just a milk bottle cap,” he muttered. The two boys were sitting on the old wooden fence. They ...

FADE IN ATLANTIC and FLOW are playing cards, MELDON is watching Atlantic and Flow, Lil is drawing the plans for the boat, and Phoenix and Leonardo are talking. Leonardo: Can ...

THE PIRATES OF ADVENTURE!!!!!!! Cast Atlantic Opal Sergant Lil Kill Man 1 Leonardo Flow Man 2 Phoenix Vinegar Inky Meldon Elizabeth Act 1 Scene 1 At rise- Atlantic is steering, ...

006. Blind ‘You don’t… look blind.’ ‘Half-blind,’ I snapped , ‘What’s a half-blind s’posed to look like, anyway? Hobbling around on a stick and begging?’ Rat wrinkled up his nose ...

"Slut!" they scream from behind her back as she hurries down the hallway with quivering legs. Filthy stares penetrate her clothes as she tries to escape those groping hands. Just ...

Good Job. See the thing I have hi-lighted red, I am a bit confused about the punctuation use. Wonders of the world flash and flaunt. Impossible dreams urge and taunt. ...

Jesus Man! That was heavy. But so good. Was that just made up or based on a like a friend or something that that's happened to? It was excellent! Wow. ...

great work darling! Just have a look at some of my corrections in red and tell me what you think. You're always wearing a mask afraid to show the world ...

I miss her eyes. Her beautiful, golden eyes. They were a colour i ' d never seen before. It was a warm loving colour, just like her. I remember her ...

My room was small and cold. It was made of nothing but cement, except for the old, weak cot, and the even weaker end table in the corner. The cloth ...

Yes, I really should have listened to Alexandra. Alexandra was my best friend since the third grade. She was bossy, annoying, arrogant and had a huge ego...basically she was a ...

Good work. All my corrections are in red. "James?" Said Alexandra , "Do you have any idea where we ' re going?" "I really don't know but i think this ...