Harley

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Golden light whispered through crisp leaves and quietly baptised the ground beneath them Wind whispers, and they dance in morning dew Celebrating a life long past. The children congregate and ...

I really loved this story, but found it quite hard to understand why there wasn't more scenes at the spot, too. For a title, how about "The Spot" or something ...

Thanks for all your help. I made it a little stronger at the end and it seems to make the story more believable and even, sorta like scales. I took ...

This is really deep and the descriptions are great. The characters feelings are put across really well and I think you've made a really excellent job of it. Like iced, ...

All I can say is that this is really... good! Keep up the good work :D

Unfortunately my parents aren't so hot with this idea, but ur pix r gr8! Catz rule!! :wink:

"Hello, Miss... Jones?" The police officer looked up from his clipboard. I nodded. "Okay. Can you tell us what happened?" "Yes." "The sky was jet black, and filled with twinkling ...

This is a very interesting piece but I don't think it flows very well. Your words are... sticky and the way it is set out is quite complex. I think ...

Okay...I know my name sucks. My full name is Lorelai Wysteria Faraway, and it sorta suits me, but the wisecracks are incredibly irritating. They're not even funny, but, of course, ...

I can totally relate to what the character is feeling. You have really expressed it well, and I am wondering if maybe the character is based on you?

I think that nurses in a mental hospital would use their patients' names a little more often, as they tend to use simpler language. Overall I think it is a ...

this was really dood, but pleeease! i want them to meet! :D

this short story is excellent. i don't know what else to say but im gonna read the sequel like, NOW :D this was totally great apart from the "potty language" ...