Harley

eep, i'm worried. i think this decides what english class i get into next year, and going by all this it aint gonna be a very good one. 8-[

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The assignment was to write a story, and i call assignments essays (as do most people in our school). Yes, the last paragraph is a little fairy-tale-ish, i'll admit. thats ...

it's an english essay. we had to choose an emotion and a genre, and write about it, so i couldn't make it too long. The "box thing"... um, it says: ...

Fear Fear. I’m not talking about a scary movie; I’m not talking about Stephen King novels. I’m talking total, utter terror, the kind that makes your body freeze and your ...

I like it!! YAY it's good! The layout is a little off, but i'll show you how i'd set it out. i just think that the layout really improves a ...

I little more emotion and it'll be great. ONE little bitty crit and that's it; Then you cry like a pup A little forced, like it was put in 'cause ...

Ooh Harley like. It's is a wee bitty choppy, but it's cool. I agree with nite on her quote, but there's not really that much wrong with it. :thumb:

It's okay, escept for a couple of things; Phillis: (laughing) Shut it. I don't think she should laugh and say "shut it". Would you? Ryan: I can’t, oh what, this ...

Umm... it's not terrible, but it's not really one to be proud of. It's clear that it's your first, and with time you will improve.

Yup, this is the best so far, no question. I think the repeated line at the end made the poem a little laboured. I think you should've made it a ...

It was... cute. No offense but it sounds like an "introduction to biology" thingy for little kids. The ryhming is too forced. I think that the next one you write ...

I agree with Tae, rhyming ruins serious poetry most of the time... She seems to have summed up everything. Practise is vital, it'll take a while before you get the ...

Gotta agree with ohhewwo on this one. It doesn't show very much emotion, y'know? Try and explain all the feeling, how you are feeling, how you think your mum and ...

Man, you people have a cookie obsession. hehe... eliz u forgot "i'm really really really really really really really really fun. really." :P