Halycon

Thanks for the review On the note about thrusting and cleaving I didn't literally mean cleaving someoene apart, more the lives of thier familes, friends etc. :)

This sounds pretty good. few little things "no mouse bat wants to be eaten." I would just have it as "no bat wants to be eaten" I can't really find ...

The Sword and the Pen . This is the path of violence sharp-edged and glittering cruel, cold, calculating designed for death ~ How many lives have been cleaved into pieces ...

This sounds really good. It kinda reminds me of the Silverwing, Sunwing, Firewing series which was also written form the perpective of bats. You wouldn't have happened to read any ...

I couldn't get any ideas for my other story and I was struggling to make it flow, so I wrote this in the meantime. Tear it apart. It was night. ...

Your poetry is amazing and this one is no different, though it it isn't one of my favourites Feel free to ignore me because you probably know 10 times more ...

Thanks for the feedback =]

Second poem . Paper face . I look upon your face and wonder what changed; it seems pale, corpselike, shallow and empty and your heart no longer beats on your ...

This is my first review so forgive me if I talk rubbish xD I really like this, its short, sweet and simple whcih works for the poem . I especially ...

If the world is my oyster you were the pearl. Two cogs in motion, we walked the empty streets laden with blankets of snow and savoured the beautiful isolation. Like ...

Tell me if you think this goes too fast I felt the warm sandy soil beneath my fingers and opened my eyes. The blue sky stared back. The sun was ...

Thank you for all the advice and reviews. I really appreciate it :)

Just wondering if this sounds any good before I decide whethe ror not to continue. I felt the warm sandy soil beneath my fingers and opened my eyes. The blue ...