Hadj

Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you like it :)

Blank comment?

Thanks for the review! A lot of the line breaks occurred automatically when I uploaded the word document, (especially the mid sentence ones). I'll fix them later, along with everything ...

Hey there! Thanks for the review! This is the first one that didn't complain about the third stanza ^.^

Thanks :)

Hey there! Thanks for the review! I was kind of in a rush to submit this for the contest, so its missing a lot of detail. I'll let you know ...

No, I meant to say "No that's no fun" :) Also, I know the third stanza is different, but if read properly it will sound alright. Try reading it a ...

Thanks for the review! I'll try to make an edited version of chapter 1 around the time I release chapter 2. As for the time period, their father died in ...

I added the breaks between stanzas ^.^

I wasn't trying to make a metaphor. Simply saying "hmm should I play tic tac toe with myself to pass the time?" And clearly thats no fun, because you always ...

As for stanzas, I was in a rush and had some formatting issues. There are supposed to be breaks between: Bubbles pop/Puddles dry Children weep/I always knew Want to go/Blurry ...

Alright, makes sense :)

2nd rewrite is here: I did my best to follow everyone's advice, let me know what you think!

Thanks for the review. This may not have been clear, but "The red poppies turned only redder" was the change in color you asked about. I know its not much ...

Hi, thanks for the review! Just for some context, -This Scene is near the end of the work (the entire framework for the story is setup, but I havent written ...