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Very nice start the way you are describing his situation/feelings is very good. Also the way his mother talked, beyond the actual thing of her stay stuff like aye, i ...

Chapter II The sun beat down on Teherah, throbbing on his dark face as he pulled his small cart along the dirt road. Around him walked many others pulling carts ...

I'm currently writing the second chapter according to a layout I've been setting up for weeks. :D Next chapter should be up within the next three days. Tonight if i ...

Thanks for the very looong review. Im grateful for the grammatical help you gave me. I often have a bit of trouble with my sentences sounds awkward/long but some of ...

Firstly, you are a good writer, KEEP IT UP! I can tell your into a lot of young adult books as that is the way you write. Which isn't a ...

Hi there. majestic palaces built of leather and strung up by rope, now was slowly burning to the ground. Once beautiful gardens surrounded by thousands upon thousands of tents now ...

Firstly I love war stories/films. I am not a big grammar nerd this the main thing I spotted. The relentless woodlands of Northern Vietnam were almost too much to bear ...

Hey guys I'm Jack, a 14 year old from the Sunny Coast, Australia. I've been writing since about the age of six. I'm basically just a normal kid and I ...

Quite an interesting concept. I have often toyed around with the idea of another race of human-like beings inhabiting the earth that existed a bit longer than the neanderthals did. ...

Chapter I Fire leapt into the night sky, licking and protruding towards the stars. The City of Nomads, Khazaj-i-Turgah, burning like a small beacon within the dark valley. Khazaj-i-Turgah with ...