Young Writers Society

Well I finally got around to reading this, and I am glad I did! Where do i begin... The first paragraph is good. It almost seems cliched, but theres a ...

Thank you, thank you, thank you so many times for posting this! I have to say, I am a very strong Catholic, but I'm also very open-hearted, and I love ...

Listen to your friends here, commas are your friends! Use them! A good way to know where to put a comma is to say the sentence out loud, and any ...

It took me a while to get around to this, but I'm finally returning the favor for all your help on Trouble on the Homefront! :D First, the dreaded nitpicks. ...

You know, I agree almost wholly with you on what you've said about love, and princes, and losers. 9 times out of 10, you're absolutely right. More men than there ...

This chapter has a lot of, how would I say, half-things. I like the idea of him finding a friendly family to stay with, and I especially like the slavery ...

You really are getting much better with descriptions. I'm a little disappointed, cause I would have liked to see more interaction between McClellan and Caleb, but what you have works. ...

Haha, I've already told you my thoughts on this chapter. Just make sure you use more physical details to describe emotions, and let us SEE what they feel. And make ...

This poem is quite nice, I must say. I especially like the phrase "virgin snow," it's not a description I hear often, so points for originality! It has a dark ...

Yay! I'm the first to review! haha. Well, let's see . . . Your description here is very well done! It might be a little less than some other people, ...

You are a God-gifted author, bubbles! I read this one, and Anna's point of view, and the emotional turbulence is absolutely crushing. The imagery is masterful, I felt like I ...

A thousand times better with description, I really managed to get the whole feeling of "going to war, excitement, adrenaline" and all that jazz. Keep improving upon your descriptions, and ...

Hi there! This story is very beautifully painted, and the imagery makes me feel like I can see everything perfectly. The only thing I would say, and it's mostly just ...

Welcome to YWS, and this is a very nice first entry! :) I feel very connected to this poem, because it reminds me a lot of myself. It's very relatable ...

HIGHWHITESOCKS again! Now, let me see about this chapter . . . First off, a good note, I like the communism joke. It's only a little tic-tac in the big ...