GryphonFledgling

Yup, I agree with Clo also. This is great and has an interesting quality, but it is all telling rather than showing. Plus, some stuff gets skimmed over so fast ...

Ah, Kylan, Kylan... You should write more things without gore and such... You are really good at it! I was a little confused (though you did warn me): does he ...

*blinks* That last sentence was... odd. It didn't really fit with the rest of the story, to suddenly have a talking hammer. Though, since it did "take his wits", it ...

Hello, hello... To start off, YWS has a policy of leaving 2 reviews on other people's works before posting 1 of your own. That was everyone has a chanced to ...

5/19/08 007 – Days January 25, 2086 I got an 89 on my Algebra test today. Mrs. Todd says there was going to be a five point curve, but everyone ...

Very nice. I love how there is so much emotion in the chapter, only to boil down to a matter of fact message. It's pretty awesome seeing how much there ...

*blinks* This was so freaky and all the while, I was wondering how this one guy knew everything in such great detail (like, about the note and the fact that ...

I really love the matter-of-fact beginning, the way he breaks in, his thoughts about it and the way he apologizes to the grave. For some reason, that just reached out ...

7/10 - It looks just like my kitten! *cuddles*

Strange that this has been around so long and I have seen it around, but never bothered to read it. Then, I do click on it and find it sadly ...

I get the inspiration when half-asleep (or asleep... I mean, dreams are wicked sources of inspiration) but I never have the energy to write the ideas down in all their ...

Ah! Big paragraphs! *cowers* Yes, to repeat the mantra of everyone else, the paragraphs are just far too large here. Break them up and they'd be much more readable. As ...

7/10 - The colors and the face are really pretty (handsome, I guess), but I'm seriously not sure who it is... Is that supposed to be a hint at the ...

I really haven't been here that long, so I can't speak for much time, but I remember the chat, which I suppose counts for something. Actually, I didn't even notice ...

If I were to follow this advice, I would stop writing right now, just from the very first few words. Yeah, I can't say as this exactly screamed "you can ...