GryphonFledgling

*sniff* The description in here is beautiful. The second paragraph especially was amazing. Main thing I noticed was a bunch of little typos. I was the epitomy of her existence. ...

D'awwww. Made me want to pick her up and snug her. The first paragraph actually confused me quite a bit and I had to go back and reread the beginning ...

ZOMG! Princess Bride! *dies* One of my favorite moments from the movie, no joke. The two things that especially jump out at me: 1) His right eye (the one on ...

Hey-oh! People have already said it, but this is a little short. Who is talking? How did they get in this situation? What happens next? Has it happened before? A ...

I like this. It was clearly more of a character ramble than something with a plot (yet), but I really liked the character's voice. Even before the character himself acknowledged ...

Shiny.

Blah, titling this was hard... Lately, I've been dabbling in some description and sometimes I really wish prose could give you an instant, clear, concrete visual. You read a book ...

I think the number one rule of fiction is: "Obey all rules... until you need to make an exception." I agree with rules in fiction, if only so that you ...

Hey there! People were talking about how long this was. Long entries are difficult to review well online, but you have an easy fix: I do believe your story is ...

I like the concept behind this, I really do. I'd like to see what you do with it. Two things I noticed: 1) Sounds like I'm living in paradise, haw? ...

Whoa. Did you paint that? It's amazing!

This. Was. Beautiful. Reminds me a bit of 1984 or V for Vendetta . I covered my mouth as the man hopped back in front of the tank ' s ...

*moved to Fiction Discussion and Tips* You'll get more feedback here. Hey there! I agree that you need to expand on this a bit more to give us an idea ...

The colours! They are gone! The world! It is in black and white! *flails* Nate, what have you done? It is strange, seeing people without their customary colors.

There need to be more places like YWS, even in the world outside the internet. I was reading over a friend of mine's school paper (from high school, no less) ...