GryphonFledgling

*changed to 18+ for strong language* :D

*hugs again*

Hey hi! Echoing Joy Sauce, I liked the way the dialogue read. It came across very naturally and smoothly. Very nice to read. However, my three main critiques mostly have ...

Got some questions for any bird owners out there, specifically about grooming: - What, if anything, do you have to provide the bird for its personal cleanliness? - How do ...

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Don't try and write a book that would work best as a film; write a book that works best as a book. Ever notice how film adaptations of books aren't ...

Would you like having a firm picture of what the freak looks like for the beginning, and, if so, what sorts of descriptions of the body are you looking for? ...

I don't see how they could determine for sure where the laptop is even if they could turn on the webcam. As stated in the article, any student who stole ...

This sucked me in, if only for the panic the character felt in space. So often you see characters in space finding it calming, or loving the stars or something. ...

Where did you stop reading? At the (lack of) title. No, I'll be back to review proper. Just don't have the time at the moment. I was just going to ...

This was nice. Short, but I liked the energy it had. A few formatting/grammar nitpicks: - "Papa" and "daddy", when used as names (like a little child calling their father), ...

I liked this. I was sort of rolling with it, thinking this is going to be "just another one of those underdog sports stories" and then wham , you hit ...

You know what? I've changed my mind a little since my last review: I sort of like how the crippled kid is sort of a periphery character right now, just ...

Hi-oh! Saw the second chapter posted and figured I should read the first one... first. Mah first suggestion: go ahead and replace the text of the old version with the ...

Banned for expecting a location at all.