GryphonFledgling

Hey-oh! Not going to nitpick too much, since I realize this is a draft and you're just putting words to paper for the NaNo-ness. One thing did really jump out ...

I was going to say something about the nearly run-on style, but it actually grew on me for this particular story. It just added something to it all. One thing ...

Hmmm... This intrigues me. Continue it? "Grr!" I let loose a furious growl. I don't really like the spelling out of the sound. It just sounds a little silly. Maybe ...

'ello, 'ello... What 'ave we 'ere? I like the dialogue in this piece. It feels nice and solid and real. A bit confused by the characters though. It seems like ...

What exactly is the difference between the Reviewer I and II badges?

Oooh, nice horror story. I can just see this being told around the campfire in the dark. which was comprised of his overly outgoing mom, his busy body dad, and ...

I meant in the conjugation of some verbs, the vowel changes. In the conjugation of others, no vowel changes. :D Hey! I know what you're talking about. Yay for "Brit ...

ZOMG! *flail* I logged on and was like "O_o What are those little circle things?". Then I was like "O.O". Then I was like "XD *spaz* Badges! They are up!".

*whoot* Congratulations Ben! *boogies*

Commenting! The boy--Please let it be him-- turns. A smile of recognition crosses his face. “Yo, Kenny!” I liked the anticipation you set up before Aiden turns around, but there ...

*whoot* I highly approve of this tutorial thingy! I myself struggled with resizing images in my day and a simply resizing makes it so much easier to see and appreciate ...

Hello! I'm GryphonFledgling and I'll be your reviewer today! A few general critiques: - Did you skip the third test? You go from going to Level 2 to meeting the ...

Drink? I can has? Surprise me. *boogies* Congrats!

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I'm GryphonFledgling and I'm here to review your story! *whoot* A few general critiques for you: Larii stepped forward out of the darkness of the ...

:D I checked here to be sure. 18+: A topic should be rated R if it has any of the following elements: - Graphic content - It is sexually explicit ...