GryphonFledgling

Very cute picture. She just looks so happy, drinking that soda. And I love how there's three main colors. It just draws the whole thing together.The best thing about it ...

Interesting idea. I'd love to read the rest of it! ~GryphonFledgling

Oui, oui! A most excellent tip, no? No wonder why YWS is such a great site! So much interaction between writers will always add up to something good! I swear, ...

Did you edit this? Because it appears to be in first person, rather than third. It's great that way... It just isn't in third person. Yeah, at first I was ...

Interesting. What exactly is his mission? What is his purpose in life? *taps fingers impatiently* Will have to read more, I suspect... He's only sixteen? How long has he had ...

Ah! My eyes! *shields them* Yes, please put spaces in between your paragraphs and each new line of dialogue by a different speaker. As is, it is all in huge ...

Awww, don't hide. We don't bite! You have most definitely come to the right place to get writing. I have been a member of several different sites, but this is ...

Hey Jenni! Go ahead and start your own post in the Welcome Forum so everyone knows who you are! Welcome Rebbecca! (is that how you spell your name? with two ...

Hello Alex and welcome to YWS! Fantasy? *perks up* A subject near and dear to my heart. Ah, you are in the perfect spot for your interests. I have been ...

I'd personally like to know a little bit more about her writing. You said that her writing is better than ever after the Pop-Tarts and Kool-Aid, but I really don't ...

Very sad. It was a great turn of the wheel, showing just how much the annoying sibling will actually be missed when they are gone. The emotion just poured off ...

Again, moving kind of fast, but you sprinkled in some descriptions! *claps* But... oops... You used a mirror. Please, please, please do something other than a mirror description. They just ...

I lived once more a moment... Eh? I'm a little confused as to what that meant. Your so focused I think you mean "you're". Your - belonging to you You're ...

Hey Joe and welcome to YWS! What genre/s do you typically write in? Are you a prose or a poetry man? I second the recommendation for you to read the ...

Ah yes, much better. I liked the fact that they find out each other's names quickly. *thumbs up* On that note: “Keri, do you go to this college?” There should ...