GryphonFledgling

I love the pure, raw grittiness that this has. It was rife with errors - mostly punctuation - but the potential of this thing just blew me away. Absolutely knocked ...

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Yeah, I'd have to agree with chocoholic that the first part really didn't connect well with the second and third, but as you say, this is from bygone days and ...

Hey and welcome to Young Writers Society! You seemed to have posted in the right area and it's great to be reading you for the first time! Now onto the ...

The emotion in this was really great. When I first started reading it, I was like "oh great, another stupid sex story." But this had so much heart to it. ...

Satu taking Rossa to her house after only just meeting her seems kind of strange, as does Rossa asking in the first place. I can maybe see Rossa asking if ...

1. Did it catch your attention? Not at first. The thing that kind of put me off was the article. I agree with everyone else that it didn't come across ...

1/3/08 011 – Red “MUTTS CALLED A DISASTER” “SITUATION CODE RED” Boston Globe Mutt Project Shut Down ~ Barbara Rowe They were supposed to be the soldiers of the future, ...

Oooh, very nice. *hooked* I liked this a great deal. You had plenty of description, but you still were able to blend it in so well and keep the story ...

Oooh, very nice. *hooked* I liked this a great deal. You had plenty of description, but you still were able to blend it in so well and keep the story ...

Agh! My eyes, my eyes! As is, this is all clumped together in one huge lump of text that is quite hard for the poor reader to make out. My ...

I am another non-poet, but I am leaving my two cents. The font really threw me off, but I really do like the poem. It could use a little more ...

Hey there, Jake! I've seen you around a little... A very little... But your eye is hard to ignore. ;) Very nice avvie. A couple of tips: Keep the reviews:posted ...

Ah, a day late and you have actually been around for a while, but in any case, I shall welcome your returned creativity! *waves welcome flag* Well, I suppose none ...

Very, very nice. Good luck presenting it! My only comment would be that it does feel a little sparse in the description department. Maybe just a tad more description about ...