GryphonFledgling

“You too, dorm partner!” Henry looked up in surprise, I'd make the bit starting with "Henry" its own paragraph, since at first I thought that Henry was talking and I ...

Hey there. I saw your post earlier about this idea. It's great that you got it on paper so fast. Whoops... Those first two lines seem really familiar. I would ...

Welcome to YWS! Very nice. My biggest concern was that the letters weren't seperated from the prose or each other in any way and so I thought they were continuations ...

Because the caterpillar gods love to laugh at you. What does "POV" stand for?

I agree with you that a child can be incredibly intelligent and mature. Trust me, my brother is 10, but he talks like some of my older friends upwards of ...

Hehe... In the first paragraph, I thought this was about an older woman and her 20-year-younger boyfriend. Let's just say by the second paragraph, I was mortified at how dirty ...

Yeah, I would do something about the cell=phone. It's amazing how far something can come in ten years or so, no? I remember my parents' cell-phones in '96 or so. ...

Very, very nice. Seriously, you are just killing me with this thing. It's just too wonderful. Charlotte does get pretty unprofessional pretty fast. Perhaps you could get a little more ...

Wow. This is pretty amazing stuff. I was a little disoriented through some of it, but then it picked right back up and I was able to figure out what ...

Wow. This is so worldly, I'd love to see where the fantastical twist comes in... Very nice writing here on your part. I love the taunt, sharp style. Nikola looked ...

Yes, I liked the explanation a bit more. It answered my questions. Thank you! :D I can't say as I agree with your reasoning about the Church (Jesus' resurrection was ...

I liked the writing on this. I'd love to know just what it was that Skits did, since he really does seem so guilty about it and it was something ...

Interesting little autobio of yourself. I liked the wit that you brought into it. Very nice. I was most certainly not bored. *two thumbs up* Why exactly do you disagree ...

Wow, this is the first time I've seen something written in first person but referring to second person (strange how those two blend together so nicely here) that actually worked. ...

Ah! My eyes! Hehe... You need to reformat this just a bit. Put an extra space (by hitting "enter") between each new paragraph. It just makes it so much easier ...