GryphonFledgling

I liked this. It was interesting and fun to read, and yet still had a lot of emotional weight. I agree most of what Sam said and point to it ...

I liked it so far. As of yet, however, there didn't seem to be much of a plot. If you are going to continue this (please do, your writing is ...

Hmmm... I will say that this confused me a bit. The main thing was the infodumps in the dialogue that actually didn't reveal anything. The dialogue felt a bit stunted ...

I have always spelled it "defense" and had never even heard of another spelling... So, of course, the correct answer is "Bob".

It was a little hard for me to get into, but I think it was partially because it was an excerpt and I hadn't had the entire book to get ...

8/10 - Verra nice... :)

:shock: Ooooh... I really liked this. I mean, really liked this. The one sided conversations were amazing, with the private thoughts alongside. You never hear them talk, but you immediately ...

Erm... I dunno. I don't think it was my brand of humor. I was able to appreciate it, and I sniggered at it, but I wouldn't say that I loved ...

Hello there... This was great, but much too short. I was cut short just as I was getting into it! Add a little more, enough to get the reader hooked ...

*squee* Bill Nye the Science Guy! I love that man... *ahem* Anyway, about your story: This could really use some revised formatting. As is, it is all one big block ...

A couple of technical nitpicks before your story: - This should probably be rated 'R' for use of the f-bomb. The ratings are there for a reason and they are ...

*snortgiggle* Very nice. Those are going over my desk. I think 2 would be my personal favorite. That is always something I have trouble with. ;)

Ah, the plight of the writer and the curse of runny ink. Very nice story here. I liked the way you literally personified a writing project. Or was it a ...

Don't laugh! This isn't funny! This is a serious problem! You sickos! ;) I loved the quotation marks around "library card."

I really like it. The relationship between her and Andrew was just so sweet and her mourning for her brother really felt genuine, rather than the "dead dog in the ...