GryphonFledgling

Ha. This was hysterical. I agree that it was a little rough (definitely go ahead with that polishing you say you are going to do - it can only get ...

I second BBB up above me. He caught the edits I was going to point out and he makes some good points. This has a whole lot of potential. Already, ...

This was really cute, but I do have to echo the earlier question: how did this little guy get all of his mom's money? I do like how in the ...

I actually liked the narration, despite it being far from the voice of your average eight year-old. It was great because it was still simplistic, despite the rather large vocabulary. ...

Very nice. I liked the idyllic description of the baby's room. I was a little confused as to why there was a bed there when the baby is obviously still ...

Hey there and welcome to YWS! Yeah, I have to second what coryab said above me. So far, while we have an interesting setting, we really have no hook. So ...

Very nice. The language of the poem was amazing. It just worked. I will say, the title of the poem was what caught my attention. I looked at that and ...

I didn't think this piece was all that long, but I do second chocoholic about the review thing. It makes everyone much happier. This looks like it could be interesting, ...

Quite interesting. I've never seen something like this before. I loved the humor of the pictures and the captions were the icing on the cake. You could follow the story ...

About description: Use it where something needs attention drawn to it. Generally, we dont' need to know that the school is brick and the roof tan. But if the lockers ...

*sniggers* I loved how the guy is totally oblivious and almost innocent and the girl is really jaded and emotionless. It totally isn't the conventional couple at all, nor the ...

Interesting. I'm curious now. It read really well all the way through up until the last few paragraphs with the whole bathroom visit. For some reason, I just couldn't seem ...

I have to say, I do like the empowerment of the women and the putting of men in their places. *evil feminist laugh* Nah, just kidding. I'm all about equal ...

"I shall call him Squishy and he shall be mine, and he shall be my Squishy. Come here Squishy, come here, little Squishy... *dissolves into babbling* Ow!" ~ Dory -"Finding ...

Awww... This was really sweet. I could kind of tell where it was going from the beginning (the storyline was a little predictable) but it was so cute. :) 'K, ...