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Re: What Life Throws at You
the explanation was for the future, when she joined that club she was 4 at the time, cheers.
Apr 9, 2011 -
Re: The End
Very good, very touching, very emotional. This is a good piece and you should be proud of that, but the art when the character starts to panic all comes too ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Slow
Good, but needs more details. What's really happening in this poem? Is she staring at a rainbow with her mates? Is she embracing her last gusts of life? Good imagery, ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: What Life Throws at You
Fourteen year old Anita has gone through a bit in life, and life for her as an ordinary, literature-nerd teenager, she becomes faced with more interruptions. This is the first ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Normally
It's alright, but like others have said, it does sound like a Disney TV show and unfortunately I hate Disney :/ If you want to make the context more grown ...
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: What Remains in my Memory
Thank you, your review really helped out
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: The Bench
This script is very funny. I can imagine it on a TV Show with laughs in the backround and everything. I was laughing at the Proposal episode with what that ...
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: The Fall
I really like this, it brings yourself into the poem as if you are really there and I love that type of involvement in stories and poems so well done! ...
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: A Heart, a Soul
Wow, that is good stuff. So emotional yet so effortless, almost. I think you should write a bit more, extend it a bit, but I don't think that particularly matters ...
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: What Remains in my Memory
His eyes; they were the only things that shone through all the crowds of smoking people. The taste of champagne in my mouth went sweeter than it should have been, ...
Mar 26, 2011 -
Re: Session 8: The Man Who Can't Be Moved
Amazing. I love the introduction of the characters and how you build that up into an amazing piece of writing. At the beginning though when they were speaking I got ...
Mar 26, 2011
