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Hi there. This i really fantastic. I think there have been a few poems and works posted on YWS about Japan but this is easily my favourite. Firstly, incredibly touching. ...

Hi there. This has potential but needs some work. Firstly, it is very, very short. I don't think you can convey enough of an impact in such short a piece. ...

Hi there. This is brilliant, and I really mean that. I love your use of brands and familiar items in the poem. "Sun Chips" is an example of that. You ...

Hi there Wow this is really lovely. When the disasters in Japan happened it was very hard to put them into words, let alone good, well-structured poetry. But you manage ...

Hi there. I'll start by saying that the language here is incredible. You paint great pictures with your words and that's a fantastic skill to have. My one problem is ...

Hello there. I really like this. I have a soft spot for lyrics and these were really good. I like these dark, and you could even say morbid lyrics. I ...

Hi there This is really good. I love the subject, and where you take it. There are a few things that you could work on, though. Firstly, it feels a ...

Pretty girls do ugly things Pretty girls steal when they have the cash Pretty girls lie when the truth is innocent Pretty girls stumble out their bedroom window With nothing ...

Hi there. This has potential but needs some work. I think that the somewhat simple structure does not work for this. I also don't like your use of rhyme. Although ...

Hi there. This is great, perfectly put together, well-structured and well formed. I love how you keep the reader going for a while. You don't know quite where it is ...

Part of me does not even want to review this, because I get that it is a very sensitive and close subject. I really do love it. You don't shy ...

Hi there I have to admit that part of me read this simply because it has my name in it, but I did really enjoy it. I like your use ...

Hi there I really like this. I love the story. The opening line draws me in completely. And I like how it is a bit of a mystery. What girl ...

Hi there I like this. Just a simple, sweet poem about a cupcake, nothing more nothing less. I like the structure and the flow of it, although I think making ...

Hi there. This is a very interesting, if not odd poem. It has a well formed structure, but I don't the idea holds much merit. I think it needs a ...