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Hi there. It is an interesting format you used there. The short sentences allow it to flow quite well. However it leaves little room for imagery and character building. I ...

Hi there. It is an interesting format you used there. The short sentences allow it to flow quite well. However it leaves little room for imagery and character building. I ...

Hey there. Great picture. I love the shadow and darkness. The little piece of poetry you wrote underneath also really added to this. I like the theme you’re going with ...

Hey this is a majorly revised version of another poem under the same title. I'm posting it again because it is so different. You can read the first version Enjoy. ...

Hi there. This is really good. If you are making a novel of this I'd love to read it. For starters, your characters are perfectly formed and really well fleshed ...

Verse 1 I don’t know if you’ve noticed But there’s not a lot of colour Around this time of year. And maybe it’s these grey skies Or maybe it’s town ...

Hi there. I did really like this. I don't think I've ever seen poem (if you could call it a poem) that uses a list and numbering like this. So ...

Hi there Wow this is really fantastic. I can see why this is a featured work. Firstly, the imagery is fantastic. I think imagery and strong pictures can be lacking ...

HI there. I'm not quite sure what I think of this poem. On one hand I dislike it and on the other I do. My problem with it is the ...

Hi there I agree with the last review, there are quite a few clichés here. Especially "patience is a virtue" just think of it this way: any phrase you have ...

HI there Good job. I really like this poem. I like how your use of language and how it breaks out of the usual love poem format. My only problem ...

There are some really lovely poetic lines here. They show a lot of skill. I think my favourite is "I don't train those who are cruel No, I am not ...

Hey there I like this. Your flow and rhythm is very well done. It has a strong beat all the way through. The only thing I have a problem with ...

Hi there This is very good. However it feels very dense and too complex. I think you would benefit from simplifying it and spacing it out a bit. Besides that, ...

Hi there. I think this needs a little bit of work. Firstly, I felt the metaphor got old very quickly. I don't think you needed it all the way through ...