Goldenheart

Well done, Mad! Your plot was well communicated. You know what the character wants. Your descriptions, the visual ones, anyway, were very good! Just a few suggestions. (Feel free to ...

It turned noisily, with the sound of grating rust. The door did not open. She twisted the knob the other way and pushed hard, jamming her shoulder into the faded ...

Oooh! I love it! Wonderful! The dialog was snappy and simple, the flow was swift, and the story had its share of suspense. I felt myself wondering if her hand ...

Hey! Your rhythm was nice, and I just loved the way the lines were situated, alternating between the same two sounds all the way through. Truly unique and interesting! I... ...

Hallo! You sound like a unique sort of person! :) I hope your papercuts heal quickly. I've always wanted to see New Zealand. I travel little. *Sigh* I've never read ...

Hallo! I am astonished at your views, as it seems mine are quite similar! I too love 'The Lord of the Rings', (The books especially, though the movies are great ...

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Hee hee! Yes, I believe that's right! I do wonder, though... did you mean 'pen' instead of 'pin'? Goldie

Hello and welcome, Blackdove! Very happy to meet you! You've come to the right site for feedback! :) Green_river is right, you'll get more comments if you comment. Glad to ...

Incredibly vivid! The varying length of the lines, and certain phrases repeated, gives it so much more drive and punch. I like it very much! Keep it up! All the ...

I, for one, enjoyed it very much. I don't wish to discredit anyone's opinion, merely to state my own. It was nice and easy to read, without awkward stumbles. The ...

'Tis NOT bad at all, in my opinion! You have summed up the depths of my surroundings and feelings in three lines! Goldie

I read the book-form of NaNoWriMo, and did my challenge alone, this January. I got to 50k around the 27 day mark. I am still panting from the exhaustion of ...

I've got no idea. Monkeys? Dragons? 'Tis a hard choice! Dragons, I admit, are very cool... but are they overrated? They are everywhere, it seems. And yet... I cannot account ...

I'm not sure whether I like prologues or not. I use them, though. In my estimation, (I am BY NO MEANS an expert!) Prologues are a legal place for information ...