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im not gonna say much, but i found this poem boring, a good idea, and its flow is terrible, but it is too damn long, i got bored about four ...

ignore this, i accidently sent it twice.

**it bugs him? poor baby... (im just messing with you.) but thats just the way we talk.**

*would it?*

i agree with the other person, plop doesnt seem right, maybe try "splat" or something else... nice poem... well, not nice, but interesting... i may or may not actually know ...

damn. thats irony for you. this story is great matierial. i disagree with whoever is is that comments above me, they are too picky...(nothing personal) there were a few cosmetic ...

*** im way sorry about the confusion. my fault bigtime, so lets hope we can correct that. *** Teledamus: "Curse the Gods, Greeks!" and at that, the man who was ...

***Technically, WE would be enemies of Deltax(Billy?) because we are Trojan... actually, im Half n half, but my people arent flip-floppers, so we will stay loyal to Troy... unless it ...

ummm... im good now. i didnt even know my characrter KNEW your characters, but im good now. sorry for the confusion. so were in troy about to meet Deltax, great.

this is his first story? thats pretty good for a first, hmmm... well, its too short, and it lacks descripive or figurative language, what he's got it an outline for ...

i think it needs to be condensed a little, its just too long saying the same things over again. granted i amy not be the best jusge of things, but ...

Nice poem, For dreams all though we are, and not for thou to be alone. we are all alike. at yet, we are all unique. it is an anomaly. keep ...

i like the idea, it presents an interesting question... not sure what though. but it needs more poetry to it, instead of just reciting... i dont know, im probably wrong, ...

Awesome, but i agree with them... absolutely. not a thing i would change.

i like the way you captured the essence of the aging of the tree, from seed to sapling to tree, to a dead log. very good.