God

Teledamus & Pelop; Pelop speaks, his face a mask of controlled rage. "First, if you ever threaten my brother again, that will be the last thing you do. And second, ...

This is something that actually happened to me last Saturday... It was Saturday afternoon in the quiet city of Hillsdale, and I was, like most of the time, bored as ...

oh. you sound so sad... anyhows... i feel rather left out... left behind, left alone? either or, or both? God: so there is a secret going around, and GOD IS ...

Teladamus & Pelop: "Curses!, we told you stay hidden, now you have endangered yourself unessesarily." whispers Pelop. "why would we want to hide her from you?" Teledamus repeats the question, ...

interesting story, im curious about where it goes from here... if anywhere?

i dont like the people like... that one who mad the comments about the cliches and apostraphes, I MEAN GET A LIFE... AND YOU READ SOME! WRITING IS NOT ABOUT ...

too true, your rhymes were off, but not that much, and the poem was odd... good though, so keep it.

i think not. that is something ive always done, i will rhyme, with only one, or two of the lines, but not in the rest, it gives it an identity ...

good poem, i like the idea, and the rhythm is a bit odd, but fine, the rhyming is good. great job.

holy dang. I GOT FIRST REPLY!!! W00T anyhows. it was interesting. and decently written, but Im wondering, have you read the book, Twilight ? too many similarities between the two. ...

good story, but YOU NEED TO SPACE YOUR PARAGRAPHS. its confusing if you dont, and like the other person said, there are some issues with it. like the family. idk... ...

**Yeah, sure, I forgot that Billy said he was going to be gone for a few days. So we just keep the story going without him.** Teladamus & Pelop: After ...

sounds more like song than a poem, but sometimes theres no difference. kinda like Don Mclean's "Vincent" (i.e. it sounds like a poem, but its a song) the subject is ...

very original idea, i like the way you wrote about [Fire?] as a living thing. but can i ask why you refer to it as feminine?

im not gonna say much, but i found this poem boring, a good idea, and its flow is terrible, but it is too damn long, i got bored about four ...