God

Pelop stood, at the entrance of the cave-opening, watching the two discuss the armor. It was unimportant to him, as far as who it belonged to, the only importance it ...

**so. my plot-line sounds kool... this is an interesting idea. cant wait to start **

this looks cool. i think ill join. Name: Richard Defonte Age: 17 Height: 5'4" Weight: 210 Appearance: fairly short, with a sturdy face, not bad looking, but is kinda... fat. ...

William: At the resturaunt, they are leaving, William doesnt really care what movie they see. The comment about the wallet had set something in motion, what a coincidence. William had ...

Ok, im not quite sure what happened, but somewhere, i got lost, and im having immense trouble following the storyline. I dont know who is who anymore, so... ?

a little sinister, but good, i wouldnt use soulless, but its your choice. the rhythm is a little choppy, but still OK. nice job overall.

A silent kiss upon my cheek, the brush of long lost memory. An ancient tomb cloaked in dust, and shrouded in dark mystery. Alone we stand against the night, ‘till ...

awesome poem, im surprised at this, great rhyme scheme, nice flow, if you say, "or would we forget them tommorow?" that might work better, peace.

Pelop: He reached his cousin, and the captive Deltax, "What do you plan for him, dear cousin?" Says Pelop "and what do you plan for my brother, who even now ...

William: As he sat in the booth of a small resturaunt, surronded by people he hardly knew. "Sorry about the intrusion, and thanks for letting me join you for lunch," ...

loved it, the rhyme scheme is great, subject matter is good, jam is great. W00T!!! GO JAM

im bored. im supposed to be taking a test, and i cant think of anything to write, someone please do something that i can relate to?

**God would like to point out that he is done playing peacemaker, it just makes things worse. so im just gonna be friends with anyone who wants to be. is ...

yeah thanks, those are th normal things that are wron, i tend to switch tense alot in my stories, so ive been trying to work on that.

absolutely he can find God wherever he goes... even YWS. i liked the poem, rhthym was interesting and unexpected, the mood was good.