God

I like this idea, and it can be applied to almost any situation like that, whether you are learning to drive a car, or whatever, it's all so... exciting at ...

hey new person, I'm God, as you can see, if you take offense at that name, my apologies, feel free to call me by any name at all. I don't ...

Welcome to YWS Roo, I am God, if you have issues with that name, you can either call me somehting else, or whatever, i'm not too big on my name. ...

there isnt much to say about this piece, it doesnt go anywhere yet.... that definatly need fixeing, but i think you have a good start.. you do know where you ...

I don't believe it needs much fixing, I like the idea, and i may steal it for a story, if you don't mind that is. the idea that memeories are ...

Hey Leoni, I may not be the most eligable of people to comment here, or to tell you what's what, but, the way I see it, lend a hand to ...

Thank you ms. Suzanne for the quite... honest... critique. Well, lets start off with the line breaks. they really have no point, other than thats how I thought the poem, ...

perhaps, my good friend, the poem only seems jolting to you, because you are assigning to it a rhythm that is not there... try reading it in a different way, ...

Let me start by saying, excellent poem, freedom is a very good topic to write about... why is it that freedom is so often compared to music... maybe music makes ...

These knights wore blue jeans, and leather jackets, and courted, the looking-glass queens. They speak not in prose, but in their pocket a rose, to give to the girl, of ...

let me state this right now. there is a reason I wrote the poem this way... well sort of... it is NOT about suicide... well, it is, but it isnt, ...

The man smiles softly, but no-one knows why. On his face a grin, but his eyes betray the lie, He's telling to the world, he's telling to himself, though all ...

Two stand on a bridge, away from the world. Midnight has gone, four hours, or more. Their hands clasped tight, in the face of the dawn. Not know what will ...

well, i was slightly surprised to read it, go to comment it, come back and find the ending massively different. I kinda sorta liked the last part of the last ...

Wow, I mean... just wow... that was amazing! the imagery was great, the flow, was intesnse, and pulled you onward, is had a very epic-poem feel to it, but thats ...