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Sombre streets of flooded yellow, dim crusted lime, scarlet red as blood, pavement melted , molded black, dripping with the crimson splash. Lamppost, where the tree once stood. Light source, ...

I absolutely love the simplicity of it. Very emotional and it's wonderful how you can put all that feeling into those short lines. Well done.

Very simplistic and soft-sounding. Some lines are too long for the stanza they are in but otherwise good poem. I love the feel of it and how you can almost ...

I see everything has already been corrected, so all I have to say is to try and shorten the amount of sylables in some lines. It does have a distinctive ...

Well done! It sort of sounds like a modern-day Shakespearian poem. Loved your choice of words and the way everything flowed into the next line. Love your writing style, fantastic! ...

Loved the rhythm, very good. Other people have already corrected what was wrong so all I have left to say is: fantastic poem, I love the feeling of it and ...

Hauntingly beautiful. I feel like I'm walking alone down a dark street when I read this. You may have used the word "lurk" one too many times but other than ...

Very well done. At last I know I'm not the only one who writes such long poems. I loved it, of course. Very well done. Very intence. It conveyed alot ...

The speaker has nothing to do with the government, but the speaker is older, knows things, has been told things. The speaker does not know good english, the speaker is ...

Thank you. I will always keep writing. :)

I wrote this just a while ago. I have to tell you, though, all the spelling and grammar errors are done on purpose. There ain't no such thing as freedom, ...

A fun poem. Good job as I see all the errors have been corrected by others. Still, dispite this, it's a good poem.

Wow. You are very good at setting mood. Fantastic work.

Thank you! My objective was to write a longer poem, but with a type of flow that would keep the reader interested.

Thank you. I thought that whole 'shrill cry call' line just needed another syllable so that's why I added the call.