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All I think of, All I dream of, Is the way you captured me, And how I shattered you. I just love that beginning. It's a great start and made ...

He Died alone. Deep in the Forest Of Silence, he lay in a puddle of his own blood. Here, among the petrified branches and still-watered streams, is where he died. ...

As others have said, some grammar errors and some breaks in the flow to watch out for. But it is a sweet poem with a nice concept. Since this is ...

Ooh! I like this. Very dramatic indeed. I loved the beat and how powerful it sounded. A very strong voice you have and boy can you use it! I can't ...

This is a pretty good poem. It flows fairly well with no breaks in the pattern, and the tone is set well. I understand what you are trying to say ...

The format sort of confused my eyes, but that's just me. It's not bad for a first attempt at this type of poem. I'm not really one for love poems, ...

Not the Christian God. Not by any means. This poem was about life and death. The tie between the two and the 'god' who must set each in motion. I ...

I am happy. (My mind...) I am always happy. (I struggle.) The world is happy. (The pain...) Everything is pretty (So dark...) and fun, (No more!) wonderful (Can't breathe...) and ...

Wow. Your imagery was just spectacular! Very well done. And the way it was worded and the flow of everything was just brilliant. I don't think you could possibly change ...

Very interesting read here. I like the idea and it was well-executed. And I agree with what the person a few posts before me said, the stanzas are much easier ...

Hmm... this had a great concept, but I'm not very sure about the flow. On one hand, it seems almost choppy, but on the other hand, I can see why. ...

Very interesting and thoughtful I liked the flow quite a bit. (I'm sorry, I'm not a great reviewer) I can't think of really anthing to change because it left such ...

I`ve removed this topic, as I realize this is not the correct category for this poem.

Servile in nature Self is Sins won’t come ‘round I keep telling my life A very interesting set-up. The way it flows is quite interesting. It’s fortunate that it’s all ...

Oh, very well done! Beautiful poem that at first glance, I wasn't expecting it to flow well with the lines varying in length so much but it really works here! ...