Gnomish

Thanks for the review! The word Cartrain is actually spelt like that, I think it's mentioned more earlier on.

Your welcome!

Thanks so much!

Thanks for the review! I'll try to give her some more fears and reactions, I definitely agree with you about it seeming a little unrealistic!

I don't think the opening section weakens the chapter, but I think you could take out the first part and just start with Eleni and Persephone talking (Not at the ...

Thanks for the review! I'll have another look at that section!

Thanks for your review! I'll fix that typo!

Thank you!

Thank you! I'm glad my version was believable, I was a bit worried it wouldn't be!

Thank you for your review! I'm glad I managed to write a good fairy tale retelling, saying as I'm a huge fan of them!

Thanks for your review! I'm pretty bad at finding the typos in my work because like you said I read it properly, but I think I saw and corrected that ...

Thanks! I'll try to add some more details!

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!

Ooh, the suspense! Nothing to say about this chapter, just post the next one soon please!

No problem, glad I could help!