GingerLizzy

Hmm... I loved the structure and flow of it all and think you have a real talent for that - better than myself anyway ^^ but I have to say ...

Hmm.. Well I liked this mainly because it was different to the other kinds of romantic fiction I usually read on here. I don't normally see any stories about people ...

I liked this and I like the 'I could talk to you forever' pun. But, to be honest, in my eyes it's not that great. It gets boring and tedious ...

Ha, this is actually really good and it made me laugh, super loads. I like how you make the verses jump from one to the other, quite abruptly, but this ...

Hmm, different and simple. Lovely, like a piece of art that you have to look at for hours until you actually understand it from the writers point of view.

This is a strange and altogether interesting piece, mixing English with Maths? It's really food actually and it made me laugh, although I have to think is it really that ...

She sits, at the edge of his bed, Watching him sleep, like a baby. Strokes his soft, angelic cheek, With a thin and shaky finger. She prays, that his chest ...

One thing I will say is that [and this is before I have read all of it] I didn't like how you called the boy a creature. Makes him sound ...

I agree with Claudy when she says that this is a poem, and by you saying that it isn't a poem because it is posted in the Romantic Fiction forum, ...

This was actually really good and you use a lot of differently beautiful imagary throughout. In the line of which Fireweed has outlined above, I think you have an over-use ...

Hmm.. Interesting and different. I can't really comment on much mind, as it seems the other people have, so all I'll say is to consider their suggestions and porbably follow ...

[Lets out a gusty sigh through her teeth] This was too much work for me to read, although I did, with an exhausting effect. You used to much description in ...

Wow, this was a good idea and I think it will prove well with some writers on here, as many can relate to the fact that we feel trapped in ...

This was an enjoyable piece to read and I thought that it was written with depp emotion and passion that made me want to ask - can I have more? ...

You used some powerful and beautiful imagary in this piece and it made it stand out from the normal and expected poetry. I loved how you described the night to ...