GingerLizzy

Thanks a lot Cpt. Smurf. Now I just need to get names of races and stuff together, which I'll put together on here, with the help of you guys maybe. ...

Lorna Jones She patted the girls back reassuringly and looked at the three stood before her; two men and a woman who stood with her rescuer. "I saw some rocks, ...

I was just listening to the radio when a topic was brought up; the government are talking about getting children to pledge allegiance to the Queen when they leave school. ...

Lorna Jones She bent down and shook the sobbing girl's shoulder gently. "Hey, come on. We gotta get moving. Let's see what they're gonna do about this storm, shall we?" ...

Fortunately, the wolves were frightened away by a bear.

I've seen a solar eclipse before... It was so pretty. I never saw the lunar one though :L

This was actually super! Oh my, I loved it. At first, I was a bit iffy about it because I thought that you're flow was a bit off, but once ...

Whoa, I think you did get confused, although I'm not sure you did. You need to touch up on your grammar and stuff like capitals and stuff. This makes your ...

I can't really say much about this, because I'm a little stumped, to be honest. I liked the imagery that you used and think that the line; "The roses that ...

Lorna Jones She marched along side her rescuers and the quivering wreck of a woman and rubbed her shoulder with a small wince. "Sorry if I hurt you." He said ...

You have a talent for writing some quirky poetry. I liked this but felt that the low became rushed and all a bit of a jumble. This might have just ...

"It must be love" - Madness

Lorna Jones "Let go?" she screamed over the storm, not sure she had heard him correctly. "Are you insane?!" She scanned the mans face for some sort of a joke, ...

Hm.. It was nice to begin with but you kind of got carried away with the amount of information that you fed the reader. Instead of making them feel as ...

Oof, doody. 8/10