GingerLizzy

I wasn't so sure about the structure in this; it made the flow seem clunky like a square wheel, you understand that right? It tended to end one line abruptly ...

Hmm.. I liked this; I thought it was a great concept, but there isn't much emotion entwined in the words of the piece and even though we know that the ...

Gosh. This is very lengthy, but all together okay. One of the small things that annoys me is the length. When I'm faced with a long poem like this, I ...

Wow Everyone seems to like the improvments Hehe, thanks everyone.

I thought this was too much like a story; it wasn't that poetic to be honest. But, it is your first post and gosh knows that my own first post ...

Wooow This is very cute Matthew my little garden gnome. Look at him; I just wanna go over and hug him - although we know that is utterly impossible. Hehe. ...

Oh my gosh.. This gave me chills down my spine! Super! I love how you created suspense with your first two lines; because you got me thinking... Ooh what's going ...

Howdy to you, can I call you Jimmy Zendrix? Gawsh, I crack myself up sometimes. ^^ This site is pretty fun if I'm honest and it's like - whoa everyone ...

Oh my gosh Matthew I love your work you little nincompoop. The colours are fantastique and mainly just random, which is wonderful. I wonder what they are actually reaching for? ...

I followed some of the advice given and managed to edit this. Is it any better do you think? Thanks anyway everyone for all of your helpful tips, I appreciate ...

I like the first best - as the sunshine and the close up make your sister look scarily innocent - although, she looks a little morbid. O.o

I agree definately; break it upi; 'cause then it'll give it a more professional look and also it may entice more people to read it. Other than that though; it ...

I actually don't know how I feel about this. It's so hard to think about the ryhthm of it all and some things are a little; huh? But, I did ...

I loved this, the flow worked well throughout the piece - which is always nice to see - especially when it is so beautifully entwined with descriptive imagery which makes ...

Oh and I haven't heard that before? Nevermind; it seems that quite a few people were discomforted by this poem and I'm not saying it;s my best work - although ...