GingerLizzy

Oof, structure, remeber? Rememebr to capitalise your "I's" as this gives your poem a more professional look. I didn't particularly like the repitition that Snoink mentions; I found it to ...

It's not too original this, although the fact that the writer seems to be bored by the whole thing could be something you could work on and elaborate over time. ...

Fortunately, her great Aunt died and left all of her furniture and money to them in her will.

I actually loved this, it was really good and I think I'm going to give it my first ever star. Hmph. [Nodded triumphantly] Okay, the one little niggly thing that ...

Gaze upon the sheep of Earth None of which have names. I think this line could be altered to fit into the structure of the poem. Perhaps re-arraange the words ...

Oof, I found this hard work with the amount of punctuation you added in there. I think you could downscale this so that there aren't so many stops and starts. ...

You have a very mystifying poem here and that's just great! I struggled with the length and your structure though; it seemed to make it jump and skip all over ...

I liked this, the stanzas were short and sweet and that is the best way. You used some good imagery but I think you could add just a little more ...

Oof, I have to say, I found this hard to deal with. It wasn't really a poem, of sorts, and you really only structured it like you were telling someone ...

The repition sent me a little crazy to be honest. I think maybe you could tone it down a little so that you either cut some stanzas, or change the ...

This is wonderful, I really liked how you infused the emotion through the piece. You made the reader feel how you felt about the man in particular, and it could ...

Fortunately, a man heard of their plight and soon married the widow, giving them a home and money.

I'd like to be a journalist and I plan to go to Uni to study it, so that's close enough. :) Welcome to YWS. I'm a greeter, and there are ...

Hm, I liked this, but I don't understand the concept as such. Y'know, that's all I seem to be saying today! I think I have misplaced my brain somewhere. I ...

[Pondered for a good few minutes] Now, I don't think you should take much notice of the review that is coming up, because I believe that I don't really have ...