Gheala

Three people burned to their deaths today, and no-one even asked any questions. Perhaps those men deserved it? I cannot know. Though the crowd - you should have seen the ...

If you could see this world. The trees and the braches. The bugs and animals. All of the beautiful life here in Africa. The land is filled with water. A ...

He was hunched over up against the base of a tree You might need to rephrase this sentence. You have "over" and "up" and "against". You can just say he ...

Oh, thank you! Thank you very much for that review. I did start to feel as though I'm having a little problem with gerunds in sentences. Obviously, I overuse them. ...

A tortured girl wastes in the back seat of her father’s Cadillac. That confused me. A tortured girl wastes what? I don't know if I'm not paying much attention here. ...

Her father is an alcoholic who works at the local cigar factory. He’s rarely home. Her mother is unemployed. The recent economic crisis made her redundant. She used to work ...

Hey, Kirby! Welcome to YWS! I love action and adventure too and I'm writing a thriller novel. Hopefully, it would be good enough someday to let people read it.

Hello! Welcome to YWS! You'll have a great time here and your writings will probably receive helpful reviews. I post excerpts from my novel and this site never disappointed me. ...

Welcome to YWS! Yes, you can post anything you want, whether that's serious or not. Personally, I post excerpt from my novel. Other people post their whole novels and poems. ...

Welcome, welcome! We're all moody, which makes us mostly stupid! @.@ But if you like writing, then you'll love this site. YWS is awesome!

Someone shook me, my eyes rolled to the source only to find a too happy soccer mom peering over me. When I first read this, I asked myself "what source?" ...

No. It doesn't matter. It won't matter for now. What matters more is your concern for it not mattering and so much complexity over a door and a chair and ...

Then fall the grubby bodies, smoky and blackened, I wasn't very fond of the word "smoky" here. I felt like you could choose a more... literary word. Coughing up dark ...

Pacific’s front hooves took off and Kris’s heart nearly stopped as she went midair. Everything went quiet for those mere seconds besides the breath she sucked in. Pacific touched down ...

My day is like someone constantly rewinding a video. Every day is the same thing. Every day has the same schedule with no room for change. I walk past people, ...