GenShawklan

Okay! :) I like that idea and I think I'll add it as a beginning - like she gets knocked out and all that a few characters who won't be ...

Chapter Two Carly - Wednesday afternoon When I come to consciousness, I am thinking exactly four things: 1) Why do I have a killer headache? 2) Why will my eyes ...

I like this so far. :) You really make the characters seem very alive, and I like how they have their own unique personalities. With some work this could be ...

Okay, thanks! :) I'll try and fix it.

As soon as the foothills of Tennessee turned into the red clay soil of Georgia, as soon as the cold snowy winters of the Midwest turned into the mild rainy ...

This is neat, but it's a lot like the book Rules by Cynthia Lord. The girl in Rules also has an autistic brother that they have created a set of ...

Maybe instead of calling this section 'Chapter One' you could just leave the date only. Not all books have to have chapter, and this might help make yours unique :)

This is very nice so far! Something that would be kind of cool to add is instead of flat out saying his adopted parents wish they hadn't adopted him, maybe ...

This is nice so far. :) Maybe you could try and add more suspense, particularly before he proposes and before she says yes. Good job!

Hi! :) It's not bad so far, but there are some things that might help you improve it. Adding lots of details (but not making it too over the top) ...

Katie Sometimes I think I remember my mom, but most of the time I’m not sure if what I remember is an actual memory or just something my mind conjured ...