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short but sweet! lol rythm was a bit funny in some places but I'm rubbish at poetry so I can't talk! funny little poem!

It rained heavily for the next week. It was almost as if the sky was crying because of Calum's death. Work was abandoned because the huts kept on collapsing. No ...

I searched the island thoroughly. It was like I was possessed. I was determined to find something- a clue, a hint, a trail of where Kit or Chloe might have ...

OK, A few comments about this. First of all-SLOW DOWN! A story like this is meant to be exciting and tense, maybe make you slightly scared because of all the ...

Kit, Alice and I searched for Chloe over the next week, but as each day went by, I thought more and more about how we might never find her. I ...

wowweee! didn't know you wrote poetry! (i can tell this is your work though because its so morbid) But i really like this! although i do think the line 'All ...

this was good, and i like the way you've included the bit about how the child doesn't know that its his grave stone, its just a rock with his name ...

This is longer, which is good, but I think you are rushing things in the story a bit. When i wrote my first piece all comments said that I needed ...

this is much better than the first part! This adds more tension and I can just imagine the characters flirting with each other! I love this, its great!

Ok, this was interesting! A bit short, but I'll read the next chapters! There were a few spelling/grammer mistakes but not many. And how did you think up the name ...

If i offend you with my comment, then sorry because i don't mean to! This was OK- I liked the bit about how Ella couldn't see and Barry couldn't speak, ...

I sank my teeth into the meat hungrily. After nearly a week without food, it tasted so good. The smell wafted up my nose and the meat scorched my throat, ...

this is really good, very exciting! A few spelling mistakes buts that it as far as nitpicking goes! i haven't read the pieces before yet because I started reading this ...

ooh! lots of peeps like your story (i told you it was good but you didn't think so!) write more, the crowd wants more!!!! mwa xx

Hey! Well, I saw this earlier, and now I can see that you've changed it a bit, which is good. But even though I'm your friend, I'm afraid that I'm ...